I pledge allegiance to the flag of the United States of America I am six years old, in first grade and I have never said The Pledge of Allegiance before. At my Quaker kindergarten, we didn’t recite it. I’m nervous to get it right. Each morning as I stand with the class, I whisper to […]
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How can I write when the world is on fire? There is the non-stop noise of helicopters through my windows, how can I write? My country is on fire, and the President is spreading gasoline, how can I write? People are succumbing by the thousands to a pandemic that ravages communities in disproportionate, direct, and […]
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Memorial Day weekend The car was loaded with all our gear for the Memorial Day weekend trip. We sat in the car in the pre-dawn light, waiting. My father in his characteristic, passive-aggressive style was revving the engine loudly to let my mom know we were waiting for her. This was how all our trips […]
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Heading out Lately, I feel as if I am shopping in the end times. I make my weekly shopping list and shop just once. Then I prepare. I make sure I have my list, mask, shopping bag, and wallet. I almost always forget my glasses and have to go back for them. My forays are […]
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Time on my hands I haven’t worn a watch in almost two months, and putting mine on the other day, its weight felt unfamiliar as did the weight of time it evoked. When you are accustomed to having no time there is a subtle heaviness to having lots of it. I wear this time like one […]
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Margaret - I love the structure of this, as well as the message, and you hooked me immediately with each little personal vignette you offered tied to the pledge. On the final one, I think it might be helpful to have a similar personal anecdote to tie it all together. The words of the pledge make for a strong hook and I think with a personal note, you could go where you need to and tie it all together.
nrlowell@comcast.net - Margaret, thanks for that feedback, I struggled with the end, and you are exactly right!
Jen Mierisch - I like how you structured this, with the Pledge becoming rote and less meaningful at the same time as you become more aware of the bad stuff happening in the country. I’m not even sure if my own kids say the Pledge anymore. Very thought provoking, and you’re right, we’ve never really had “liberty and justice for all.”
nrlowell@comcast.net - Thanks Jen.
YeahWrite #478 Weekly Writing Challenge Winners - […] of disparate parts together into one whole, cohesive piece. Take a look at Nancy’s essay, The Pledge of Allegiance. She uses each phrase to illustrate her changing relationship to the pledge and to connect a […]